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Bytheendofthischapter,you'
llbeabletoreviseyourparagraphsandmakethemcohesive.
Doyouknowwhatcohesivemeans?
Cohesive:
whenallthepartsarerelatedtoformawhole.
You'
llmakeyourparagraphscohesivebylearningtwothings:
1)defineacohesiveparagraphand
2)writeacohesiveparagraphusing
atopicsentence
supportingsentencesand
transitions.
BeingCohesive:
WhatIsAParagraph?
Lookatthefollowingletter.InChapter3,yourevisedittomakeitcomplete.Butsomethingisstillwrong.Doyouknowwhatitis?
22April200X
MsFionaGreen
100ClearwaterBayRoad
SaiKungNT
DearMsGreen
PPS
Irefertoyourrecentcommunication,andforyourinformationpleasebeadvisedthatthePPSdetailsandapplicationformweresenttoyouatanearlierdate.Ifyoucompleteandreturntheformtous,wecanprocessyourapplicationimmediately.Thankyouforyourkindattention.
Yourssincerely
CleverMan
Answer:
Manager
SmartBranch
What'
swrongwiththisletter?
Canyouseethat
itonlyhasoneparagraph?
theparagraphisverylong?
thereareseveralunrelatedideasintheparagraph?
Asaresult,theparagraphinthisletterisnotcohesive.
Youneedtoreviseparagraphslikethis.
Toachievethis,youneedtoknowtheanswertothefollowingquestion:
Whatisacohesiveparagraph?
Beforeyoucanwriteacohesiveparagraph,youneedtoknowwhatacohesiveparagraphis.
Doyouknowwhatacohesiveparagraphis?
Choosetheoptionthatyouthinkbestdescribesacohesiveparagraph.
1.Acohesiveparagraphisonelongsentencecontainingmanyunrelatedideasorsubjects.
2.Acohesiveparagraphisagroupofunrelatedsentencescontainingmanyunrelatedideasorsubjects.
3.Acohesiveparagraphisagroupofsentencesrelatedtooneanotherbyasingleideaorsubject.
4.Acohesiveparagraphisonelongsentencecontainingoneideaorsubject.
LearningPoint1
Aparagraphisagroupofsentencesrelatedtooneanotherbyasinglesubjectoridea.
Allthesentencesinaparagraphshouldberelatedtothatoneidea.
Ifthey'
rerelated,thentheparagraphwillbecohesive.
Remember:
oneparagraph,oneidea.Beginanewparagrapheachtimeyouintroduceanewidea.
NowtakeablanksheetofpaperandtrytorevisetheletterfromCleverMantoMsGreen.
Irefertoyourrecentcommunication.
ForyourinformationpleasebeadvisedthatthePPSdetailsandapplicationformweresenttoyouatanearlierdate.
Ifyoucompleteandreturntheformtous,wecanprocessyourapplicationimmediately.
Thankyouforyourkindattention.
Nowtherearefourparagraphsinsteadofone.Eachoftheseparagraphs,though,containsjustonesentence.Youcanhaveonlyonesentenceinaparagraph.However,aparagraphusuallycontainsmorethanonesentence.
Theruleis:
Newidea,newparagraph
Youcanpractisethisruleinthefollowingexercise.
Thetensentencesbelowalldescribeamarket.LookatthesentencesandthenanswerthequestionsinboxesAandB.
ThebuildingbetweenHenesseyRoadandLockhartRoadisthemarket.
Itwasbuiltin1875.
Themarketsellsfreshfood,likefish.
Italsosellsfruit.
Italsosellsvegetables.
Itusedtosellmeat.
Meatisnowsoldinthesupermarket.
Themarketisopensevendaysaweek.
Itisopenfrom7amto1pmandthenagainfrom4pmto8pm.
ItisclosedduringtheNewYearHoliday.
A:
Ifyouwerewritinganessayonthesubjectofthemarketusingthesesentences,howmanyparagraphsdoyouthinkyouwouldneed?
1,2,3,4
B:
Whatwouldbethemainideasofeachoftheseparagraphs?
HenesseyRoad
Thebuilding
Thefood
Openingtimes
Thethreeparagraphsbelowcontainthetensentencesfromtheaboveexercise.
1.ThebuildingThebuildingbetweenHenesseyRoadandLockhartRoadisthemarket.Itwasbuiltin1875.
2.ThefoodThemarketsellsfreshfood,likefish.Italsosellsfruit.Italsosellsvegetables.Itusedtosellmeat.Meatisnowsoldinthesupermarket.
3.OpeningtimesThemarketisopensevendaysaweek.Itisopenfrom7amto1pmandthenagainfrom4pmto8pm.ItisclosedduringtheNewYearHoliday.
Eachoftheseparagraphscontainsagroupofsentencesthatarerelatedtoasingleidea.Canyouidentifytheideaineachparagraph?
Answers:
Paragraph1talksaboutthebuilding:
whereit'
slocatedandwhenitwasbuilt.Itdoesn'
ttalkaboutanythingelse.
Paragraph2talksaboutthedifferentkindsoffoodthatweresoldandaresoldnow.Itdoesn'
Paragraph3talksabouttheopeningtimes.Itdoesn'
WhatisaCohesiveParagraph?
vejustlearnedhowtodefineacohesiveparagraph:
Acohesiveparagraphisagroupofsentencesallrelatedtooneidea.
renowgoingtolearnhowtowriteacohesiveparagraph.
Doyourememberthethreethingsthatcanhelpmakeeachparagraphyouwritecohesive?
atopicsentence
supportingsentences
transitions
WhatIsATopicSentence?
Inthissection,you'
regoingtodiscovertwothings:
whatatopicsentenceisand
whatatopicsentencedoes.
Inbusinesswriting,thetopicsentenceis
usuallythefirstsentenceoftheparagraph
short,withonly7to10words
themostgeneralsentenceintheparagraph.
Lookatthefollowingexampleofatopicsentence.ItdescribestheHSBCHomeMortgageLoan.
OurHomeMortgageLoaneasesthestressofbuyingproperty.Ourtermsareverycompetitive.Theflexiblerepaymentscheduleenablesyoutobudgetyourexpenses.Inaddition,itgivesyouaclearpictureofyourfinancialcommitmentforthewholeperiod.
Noticethatthetopicsentence
isthefirstsentenceoftheparagraph
hasonlytenwords
containsgeneralinformation;
theothersentencescontainspecificinformation.
WhatDoesATopicSentenceDo?
Doyouknowwhatatopicsentencedoes?
Inbusinesswriting,thetopicsentence:
summarisesthemainideaoftheparagraph
helpsthereaderpredictwhattheparagraphisabout.
Lookagainattheexampleofthetopicsentencedescribingamortgageloan.Notethatthetopicsentence:
summarisesthemainidea,iethataHomeMortgageLoaneasesthestressofbuyingproperty
suggeststherestoftheparagraphwilldescribehowtheLoaneasesthestress.
LearningPoint2
Thetopicsentencesummarisesthemainideaoftheparagraph.
Itisthemostgeneralsentenceintheparagraph.
Formaximumimpact,thetopicsentenceshouldbeshort,withonly7-10words.
Inbusinesswriting,thetopicsentenceisusuallythefirstsentenceoftheparagraph.Thetopicsentencehelpsthereaderpredictwhattheparagraphisabout.
Intheexercisebelow,eachgroupofsentencescouldformaparagraphiftheywerere-organised.
Trytoidentifythetopicsentenceineachgroup,iethesentencethatshouldgofirst.
1.
a.Yourstaffneedtofeelthatyouvaluetheirwork.
b.Asateamleader,youfaceseveralchallenges.
c.Staffalsowanttobetreatedasindividuals.
d.Inaddition,youneedtomakethemawareoftheteam'
swork.
e.Throughyouractions,youmustearntheirrespect.
Bintroducestheideaofateamleader'
schallenges,theothersentenceslistsomeofthesechallenges.
2.
a.Everyonealsoknowsinwhatareastheyneedtoimprove.
b.Finally,everyoneknowswhatisexpectedoftheminthefuture.
c.Inaddition,everyoneknowshowtheycanimprove.
d.Agoodappraisalsystemproducesfourresults.
e.Everyoneisawareoftheirachievements.
Dintroducestheideaofagoodappraisalsystemsayingtherearefourresults.Theothersentenseslistthefourresults.
3.
a.Inflationseemstobeontherise.
b.Everydaythenewspaperbringsmorebadnews.
c.Olderpeopleareworriedabouttheirpensionschemes.
d.Majordepartmentstoresareclosingdown.
e.Theunemploymentfiguresarerising.
Bintroducesthestatementthatnewspapersbringbadnews.Theothersentenseslistsomeexamplesofthisbadnews.
TopicSentence
Inthisexercise,thetopicsentenceismissing.Writeatopicsentencethat
introducesthesubjectoftheparagraphand
summarisesthemainideaoftheparagraph.
1.Problemsinservice.
a.First,phonesareansweredtooslowly.
b.Secon
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